One of many ads we've sprinkled over Google, actually. But this one has my favorite copy. Zarf wrote the last line. (Yes, it would be better with "and", but there is a 35-character-per-line limit.)
You want the full stop after the first clause to maximize the impact of the second. It isn't quite grammatical ("then eat them" is not a sentence) but it's catchier.
is there a one-page e-mailable description of the volity stuff that I can post or send to friends? I have a couple of groups who might want to play, or even make, but need a better intro than I can give them.
well, I'm looking for something to e-mail to people I game on line with, so this isn't just a theoretical exercise. I'll probably start with what you said and include the link.
But, er, don't click that link, because it'll cost us like a nickel if you do. :) I'd rather spend the nickels on people who actually have never heard of Volity before. (It just takes you to http://volity.net anyway.)
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Date: 2006-08-17 12:15 am (UTC)Good ad.
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Date: 2006-08-17 12:16 am (UTC)no subject
Date: 2006-08-17 01:28 pm (UTC)"Lie to your friends. Then eat them."
You want the full stop after the first clause to maximize the impact of the second. It isn't quite grammatical ("then eat them" is not a sentence) but it's catchier.
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Date: 2006-08-18 12:07 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2006-08-18 08:46 pm (UTC)I like the constrast between the implied seriousness of the full stop and the flipness of the actual content. But I'm weird that way.
The comma seems strange.
Date: 2006-08-17 12:18 am (UTC)Lie to your friends -- then eat them.
Well maybe. I'm not sure how those two textual pauses are different, but one feels good, the other doesn't.
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Date: 2006-08-17 12:34 am (UTC)no subject
Date: 2006-08-17 12:42 am (UTC)no subject
Date: 2006-08-17 01:04 am (UTC)no subject
Date: 2006-08-17 03:51 am (UTC)I'm sure there is an intermediate-sized version, but I'm not sure what it is.
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Date: 2006-08-17 12:30 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2006-08-17 12:35 am (UTC)no subject
Date: 2006-08-17 12:39 am (UTC)But, er, don't click that link, because it'll cost us like a nickel if you do. :) I'd rather spend the nickels on people who actually have never heard of Volity before. (It just takes you to http://volity.net anyway.)
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Date: 2006-08-17 02:17 am (UTC)