It starts.

[prog]

One of many ads we've sprinkled over Google, actually. But this one has my favorite copy. Zarf wrote the last line. (Yes, it would be better with "and", but there is a 35-character-per-line limit.)

Comments

[treacle-well.livejournal.com]

It sounds catchier without the "and" and a semi-colon instead of comma makes it sound stodgy.

Good ad.

The comma seems strange.

[kyroraz.livejournal.com]

As a person who has been criticized, of course, for using commas too much, it just seems to read very strangely ...

Lie to your friends -- then eat them.

Well maybe. I'm not sure how those two textual pauses are different, but one feels good, the other doesn't.

[ruthling.livejournal.com]

is there a one-page e-mailable description of the volity stuff that I can post or send to friends? I have a couple of groups who might want to play, or even make, but need a better intro than I can give them.

[hauntmeister.livejournal.com]

Hey, that link isn't clickable!

[gemini6ice.livejournal.com]

then I would suggest "Lie to your friends–then eat them."